The story is good but it does seem like your rushing the plot. can you add like there mind sets in what there thinking or feeling, that will help the story. if my words are to hush I do apologize for what I'm saying to you that might be to mean to you. i love your story and keep up the good work.
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The story is good but it does seem like your rushing the plot. can you add like there mind sets in what there thinking or feeling, that will help the story.
if my words are to hush I do apologize for what I'm saying to you that might be to mean to you.
i love your story and keep up the good work.
2021-08-21
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