Hey authy! this is just a suggestion no offence but from next tym, can u write these lines in the character's respective chats coz reading this feels like only reading the character's pov and tbh it's quite difficult to relate and get emotionally connected with the characters as an individual. You can take this as an example, like she's talking to herself but like "Dinner with taha?..Alone...In our room?...and Just the two of us?😳" and then change the chat while continuing.. "Romantic possibilities? Check. Candlelight vibes? Maybe....what if...Honeymoon-level energy? Possibly. xyz...." and take pauses in between for us to have a connection while reading. Well, I see you've improved a lot at writing dialogues in comparison to the first few chapters but u can make it even better as ur writing style would make it cherry on top fr!✨
2025-02-15
10
Gem💎
ya allah....this is just so hilarious 😂 iska thought process pata nii kaha se inspire hua haii...🤣
2025-02-15
1
Angelina☺️
it's more like a noble plzzz try to convert it into chat otherwise story is good👍
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Adi Ash
Hey authy! this is just a suggestion no offence but from next tym, can u write these lines in the character's respective chats coz reading this feels like only reading the character's pov and tbh it's quite difficult to relate and get emotionally connected with the characters as an individual. You can take this as an example, like she's talking to herself but like "Dinner with taha?..Alone...In our room?...and Just the two of us?😳"
and then change the chat while continuing..
"Romantic possibilities? Check. Candlelight vibes? Maybe....what if...Honeymoon-level energy? Possibly. xyz...." and take pauses in between for us to have a connection while reading. Well, I see you've improved a lot at writing dialogues in comparison to the first few chapters but u can make it even better as ur writing style would make it cherry on top fr!✨
2025-02-15
10
Gem💎
ya allah....this is just so hilarious 😂
iska thought process pata nii kaha se inspire hua haii...🤣
2025-02-15
1
Angelina☺️
it's more like a noble plzzz try to convert it into chat otherwise story is good👍
2025-02-16
1