sry but the ml which u have potrayed till now has not shown any good obsession possive thing all I saw is his unnecessary anger verbal and physical abuse like holding her by neck and her hairs which didn't look sensual at all also many dialouges, which are kind of punch lines and gives that obsession and possession feel also gives butterflies to readers were there but feeling wasn't same it was like smtg like the ml is full of ego anger attitude without brain
I think u might have read Jenny s story her story is that dark romance, ml is rough, and what not, but when u read, u will automatically feel butterflies and most impt 1st impression of the character if u haven't, u should give it a read. u will understand what difference I am pointing out it's just feedback: no personal feelings all the best also don't follow the clut if someone has that writing skills in them, their stories will definitely shine
2025-03-07
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Amruta
how can u say double standard author see billions or millions of users read the stories all stories including dark romance and yah some people also always comment to change ml or make fl strong nobody always fully support at first maybe 10-20 people comment that it's not good change ml and all but 100 others liked but how can u say that also those who commented in ur story liked other dark romance and being partial to you they maybe new readers who never read that and obviously it's ur story u can do whatever you want but some people always get inspired from this I'm not saying that change ml or all but still he should get appropriately punishment or how can u justify his act that's all I wanna say
2025-04-19
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Thushu
you know what you guys want readers to comment on your chat story but it should be good comments only whether they like or not if they don't like or hate ML's behaviour and comment on him you give justification for his act he is not that bad 😐
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sry but the ml which u have potrayed till now has not shown any good obsession possive thing all I saw is his unnecessary anger verbal and physical abuse like holding her by neck and her hairs which didn't look sensual at all
also many dialouges, which are kind of punch lines and gives that obsession and possession feel also gives butterflies to readers were there but feeling wasn't same it was like smtg like the ml is full of ego anger attitude without brain
I think u might have read Jenny s story her story is that dark romance, ml is rough, and what not, but when u read, u will automatically feel butterflies and most impt 1st impression of the character
if u haven't, u should give it a read. u will understand what difference I am pointing out
it's just feedback: no personal feelings
all the best
also don't follow the clut
if someone has that writing skills in them, their stories will definitely shine
2025-03-07
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Amruta
how can u say double standard author see billions or millions of users read the stories all stories including dark romance and yah some people also always comment to change ml or make fl strong nobody always fully support at first maybe 10-20 people comment that it's not good change ml and all but 100 others liked but how can u say that also those who commented in ur story liked other dark romance and being partial to you they maybe new readers who never read that and obviously it's ur story u can do whatever you want but some people always get inspired from this I'm not saying that change ml or all but still he should get appropriately punishment or how can u justify his act that's all I wanna say
2025-04-19
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Thushu
you know what you guys want readers to comment on your chat story but it should be good comments only whether they like or not if they don't like or hate ML's behaviour and comment on him you give justification for his act he is not that bad 😐
2025-02-17
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