The plot of the story is very good but there are major plot holes that ruin the good flow. The emotions of the main character also don't have a smooth transition.
Overall it's a good story which needs some tweaking to make it into a great story. Still, good work Author. 🩷
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Moonlight
The plot of the story is very good but there are major plot holes that ruin the good flow. The emotions of the main character also don't have a smooth transition.
Overall it's a good story which needs some tweaking to make it into a great story. Still, good work Author. 🩷
2024-10-28
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Venizia
I loved it 👏🏼👏🏼👏🏼👏🏼 great great story
2024-09-26
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Venizia
so cute
2024-09-26
0